ใครเก่งอังกฤษ ช่วยตรวจเนื้อหาหน่อยจิ

[Natapat Songsri]

Dear Sir/Madam:

 I have grade 3.08 degree. My talent is draw Thai pattern or ben-jha-rong and  make The bai-sri.  I can proliferate and tell very well about Thai’s artistic culture to foreigrer.  I’m friendly.  I can change myself suit other and prepare to learn new language, culture in Sweden

            I learn English many years by Thai teacher and native speaker but I think scanty for me.  When Lund University is announce give scholarship for study.  I should get it for college education.  I interested not only scholarship in The Lund University but also other I interested Sweden’s  language, food, culture, other as The Lund Cathedral, Saint Lucia Day, Swedish meatball.     I hope that when I graduate at Lund University. I’m will live and working in Sweden because there is so beautiful popular and famous. I real confidence to learn in Lund University until graduate and very well to live working in Sweden. Please believe in myself

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บรรทัดที่สองก็ผิดแล้ววว แต่ราเองก็ไม่เก่งภาษาอังกฤษ รู้แต่ว่าเนื้อหาหลังๆ นี่แปร่งๆ แหละ น่าจะผิดไวยกรณ์อะไรสักอย่าง ที่เราเองก็บอกไม่ถูฏ คือมันอ่านไม่รู้เรื่องแล้วอะ

[ต๊ะ' โมเอะ]

foreigner เขียนผิดนะ

เราไม่ได้เก่งมากมาย แต่อ่านแล้วก็ยังดูงงๆอยู่นะ

ขอภาคภาษาไทยได้มะ ?

แล้วก็บรรทัดสุดท้าย มันน่าจะแปลว่า "กรุณาเชื่อมั่นในตัวฉัน" มันแปลกๆนะครัช - -*

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บรรทัดแรกตัดdegreeออก บรรทัดสองdraw เป็น drawing บรรทัดสามไม่จำเป็นต้องใช้คำproliferateก็ได้ บรรทัดที่ 5 หมายความว่า i can adapt myself ปะ
พารากราฟสองใช้scanty มันแหม่งๆนะใช้ it is not enough for me ดีกว่า บรรทัดสี่แก้เป็น but also interested in Sweden's language, food, and culture such as The Lund Cathedal บลาบลา บรรทัด 6 ตัด 'm ออก ประโยคก่อนสุดท้าย i am real confidence that i can learn... ประโยคสุดท้ายไม่น่าเขียนนะมันแปร่งๆอะ

[Thenuttaphorn]

Dear Sir/Madam: (Dear Mr. /Mrs. คนที่เราจะเขียนไปหา​ หรือใช้เป็นตำแหน่งจะเหมาะสมกว่า)

 I have grade 3.08 degree. (My GPA is 3.08)My talent is draw Thai pattern or ben-jha-rong and  make The bai-sri. (My special talents are drawing Ben-jha-rong or Thai pattern and making The Bai-Sri)  I can proliferate and tell very well about Thai’s artistic culture to foreigrer.(I know a lot about this art culture and I'm able to expressed my knowledge to foreigners)  I’m friendly.  I can change myself suit other and prepare to learn new language, culture in Sweden (I can adapt myself into any kind of situation and I'm very excited to learn new language and culture in Sweden)

            I learn English many years by Thai teacher and native speaker but I think scanty for me. (I have been studying English for many years with Thai and native teachers, but I don't think it's enough for me)  When Lund University is announce give scholarship for study. (when I found out that Lund University give out scholarship)  I should get it for college education. (I'm very excited and I'm passionately want the scholarship)  I interested not only scholarship in The Lund University but also other I interested Sweden’s  language, food, culture, other as The Lund Cathedral, Saint Lucia Day, Swedish meatball.  (not only the scholarship that I interested in, but I also interested in Sweden culture including language, food, national holiday, and festival)    I hope that when I graduate at Lund University. (I hope that I can get to study in Lund University and when I graduate) I’m will live and working in Sweden because there is so beautiful popular and famous. (I also want to work and live there. Because there are a lot of beautiful and famous places in Sweden) I real confidence to learn in Lund University until graduate and very well to live working in Sweden. (I would really appreciate your scholarship and I will do my best if I get it.) Please believe in myself (please believe in me.)

(with all respect)

[พี่เอกอิ๊ง]

Dear Sir/Madam:

My GPA is 3.08. My special talents are drawing Ben-jha-rong, a Thai pattern drawing, and making Bai-sri. I can inform very clearly about Thai art. I am friendly, outgoing and keen on learning new language and Swedish culture as well.

I have studied English for many years both from Thai teachers and native speakers, but I think I wanted more. So, when Lund University announces the scholarship. I suddenly know that I need it. Besides, I am interested not only scholarship in The Lund University but also others which include Swedish food, culture,The Lund Cathedral, Saint Lucia Day, and Swedish meatball.

I hope that after graduating from The Lund University. I will be able to live and work in Sweden because I really like the country which is so beautiful, popular and famous. I absolutely have enough confidence to do what I have said. Please believe in me.

Best regards

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